Thursday, August 10, 2006


SUNSET

By Maya
age 13

Feeling the warmth against my skin
The coarse sand beneath my feet.
The wind carressing my face
Turquoise waters splashing
Along the coast
Sparkling rays
Glistening like diamonds
On the rippling waves
Orange and rose highlight
The expanse above
As dusk slowly falls.

66 comments:

southpaw 10:05 AM  

She's inherited all ur writing capacities...:) "Aagaas yeh hai to anjaam kitna achcha hoga" wow!!!

prithz 10:25 AM  

Very sweet!!!!

Hey,i read ur previous post... loved it tons!!! So sweet of u... i wish u and ur hubby share a lot more of each other, thru ur best times... take care

neihal 10:38 AM  

she is your daughter..right?....well written...like mother like daughter...god bless her.

sudhav 11:10 AM  
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sudhav 11:12 AM  

lalitha, looks like maya has inherited all your talents.Great piece of writing..
How is maya spending her vaccation? i think its coming to end isin't lalitha?

Srijith Unni 11:17 AM  

Hi,

This is an awesome piece of writing. and you say it comes from a 13 year old.. I am truly spellbounded.

The description was so vivid and fascinating. Please convey my best wishes to her.

With Best Regards,
Srijith Unni.

SCRIBBLEZ TO WAKEUP 11:18 AM  

Very nice...I could see the gloden ripples or waves over the water as I read. Do pass my errr, is it best wishes? to Maya! :)

Alapana 11:25 AM  

Amazing,i could feel the glow of the golden sun on the waves while going through those lines.God bless her.
I read your previous post and had a smile reading it,made my husband read it,though i am married only 3 months i have my share of arguments with him,and at times i keep wondering why did i get married at all? well,the answer lies in what you said,maybe diff words but the meaning is same scribbled in my personal diary:)

starry nights 12:10 PM  

Thank you Raj. I think she is just talented.

starry nights 12:10 PM  

Prithz..Thank you prithz

starry nights 12:11 PM  

Thank you Neihal.I have to show her all these comments on her poems.she writes stories also.

starry nights 12:12 PM  

Sudha..thanks. she is having a good time.she loves to read.

KK 12:13 PM  

Very nicely written!!
She surely has inherited your talents!!

starry nights 12:13 PM  

Thank you srijith.she wrote it at 13 and has been writing even younger than that.

starry nights 12:13 PM  

Thank you scribblez.

starry nights 12:15 PM  

Alpana..newly married.There are ups and downs but it makes you strongerand you hold on to each other. A marriage without any problems is found only in story books. Thank you. I wish you and your husband many many beautiful years ahead.

starry nights 12:34 PM  

KK..thank you.

Contented 1:25 PM  

Very beautiful!! Quite amazing to write such brilliantly at that young!
Awwww I am gonna miss them for a while...My best wishes with her.

Thank you very much for your kind words! I appreciate it a lot. I will write to you now and then If I may so....All the best and wish you a happy family life...:)

Natasha 1:49 PM  

How adorable! My little brother wrote something similar, I think I should share that as well on my blog!

priya 2:05 PM  

I cud she her maturity and her patience in her poem.

I wish her good luck starry....

ari4u 2:50 PM  

Very nice, sweet and simple :) I like this one. Excellent for a 13 year old.

indianangel 3:34 PM  

Very nice! More nice that you are encouraging your child to decide what she wants to do at her age!Good luck to your kid!

starry nights 3:37 PM  

Contented. I am really going to miss your posts.Please write to me sometime.you have my e-mail. wishing you all the best in your endeavours.

starry nights 3:37 PM  

Priya..thank you.

starry nights 3:38 PM  

Natasha..you should post it. I have posted a few written by maya and also by Vijay.

starry nights 3:38 PM  

Ari4u..thanks.

starry nights 3:39 PM  

Indianangel..thank you.she is a lot older now.

samuru999 5:03 PM  

Very nice poem!
And only thirteen... wonderful!

faith 5:08 PM  

sweet!!

*smiles*

passerby55 5:32 PM  

this is a wonderful piece of imagination......

MAya is indeed talented.
encourage her...

thanks for sharing this, lalitha.

Sunita 7:35 PM  

Raj told me she's ur daughter...wow!!! she is surely talented.

Alapana 8:34 PM  

Your comment for my post says " your friend needed a boost to build her selfesteem"
Well,she is my student or rather was my student:)

starry nights 8:41 PM  

Margie..thank you

starry nights 8:42 PM  

Sunita..yes my daughter.she wrote this at age 13.

starry nights 8:42 PM  

Passerby..thank you.

starry nights 8:43 PM  

Alapana..sorry about that I thought she was your friend.

Aditi 9:19 PM  

Wow.. beautiful expressions and yet so young. She is quite talented.. and has a wonderful mother to encourage her as well. That is important

Keshi 9:31 PM  

ur daughter wrote that? OMG I should say Like Mother Like Daughter...wow!

Keshi.

ketki 10:35 PM  

hey beautiful pic and a very nice post!

Anand 12:19 AM  

awesome...
just reading the poem makes u mind feel so serene and calm!

sophie 2:21 AM  

wow ....real super kid...very talented...
very nice

Neers 3:00 AM  

ohhhh and i missed being 13 again!!
this was truly amazing and like everyone else...i would say.. a true gift!

Rose 3:06 AM  

OMG!!!!!

She is I-N-C-R-E-D-I-Ble.. You know that dont you?? :)

Dont tell me she had spelt 'Turquoise' correctly.. Dont tell me.. Coz if you do I have GOT TO jump into a well..

:)))

..Me

Ganesh Ranganathan 4:54 AM  

Is that written by your daughter?? WOW...very nice for a 13 y/o

karmic_jay 5:22 AM  

That's from your daughter? Wow.. Simple yet so eloquent. :)

Has to be me 5:47 AM  

Its just awesome esp considering tht shes just 13. Totally impressed.

christabelle 6:44 AM  

hey, written by a 13yr old?, why, u must be such a proud mother, pls post her pic, I'd like to see this little angel.

Not surprised anyway like mother like daughter.

This is beautiful!!!

starry nights 7:42 AM  

Keshi..yes it was written by my daughter. She really has the gift of writing.

starry nights 7:42 AM  

Ketki..welcome to my blog and please do stop by again.

starry nights 7:43 AM  

Anand..thank you.

starry nights 7:43 AM  

Sophie..thank you.

starry nights 7:44 AM  

Neers. thank you. Looking at the way you write I am sure you were like Maya at 13.

starry nights 7:46 AM  

Rose..thank you. Even before she could learn to spell she would be asking us the spelling and write stories and poem. I have some written at 6yrs old.She has won spelling contests at school and really has a very good vocabulary.

starry nights 7:46 AM  

Ganesh..thank you.

starry nights 7:46 AM  

Jay..thank you.

starry nights 7:47 AM  

Has to be me..thank you.

starry nights 7:48 AM  

Christabelle. thank you. she is not 13 anymore, she is a lot older.

Hip Grandma 2:53 PM  

lalitha,
i guess maya is your daughter.her poem took me to sunset in kanya kumari that i had seen when i was a teenager.pat her on the shoulder for me.

starry nights 2:57 PM  

thank you Preeta. I will let her read the comments.

Rose 2:56 AM  

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!!!!!

Where is the well???

WHERE IS THE WELL????

;))))

..Me

jac 4:02 AM  

Congrats to Maya

adi 6:44 AM  

beautifull...

Eclipsed Thoughts 8:37 PM  

A beautiful piece...
your daughter wrote it??
AMAZING!!!
Few things flow in the genes i guess...

Jeevan 6:08 AM  

Maya u have writen well, you are a nice nature watcher. keep on coming...

Keshi 10:29 PM  

like u...

Keshi.

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